Gabri Rigotti’s Twilight

On May 17, 2016May 23, 2018 By Nicholas KlacsanzkyIn Haiku1 Comment

twilight the sky mountains its silhouettes

This is one of those haiku that you got to read several times over to see everything in it. One liners are commonly this way, as they can be read in several ways due to having no punctuation and phrases bleeding together.

Let’s breakdown the various ways it can be read:

“twilight/the sky mountains/its silhouettes”

“twilight/the sky/mountains/its silhouettes”

“twilight the sky/mountains its silhouettes”

… and maybe more.

From the various ways of reading it, one can a sense things beyond our comprehension or usual understanding–that behind our usual perception is an entirely different world, that we might be missing out on.

“sky mountains” could be clouds, or it could mean the mountains appear to be in the sky with the lack of visibility.

If a haiku confuses or puzzles you, but makes you feel something (especially something personable), it can be said that the haiku has achieved a great deal. Haiku should not be something explained and clearcut. It should have mystery, make the reader change their state of consciousness, to break out of our usual perception of life.

I think Gabri’s haiku has achieved this.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)

Marina Balmaceda Paredes’ Spiderweb

On May 17, 2016May 23, 2018 By Nicholas KlacsanzkyIn HaikuLeave a comment

16+-+1

This is a good example of a leap in a haiku. We have two parts “spiderweb dew” and “I read an old letter.” The leap the writer makes in seeing the relationship between the two parts make a third part in the reader’s mind.

The third part to me is about the irrelevancy of the dew on the spiderweb and the emotional power behind reading an old letter, and how these relate. The dew, while beautiful, is something unneeded on the spiderweb, and the spider would rather have a nice fly. The old letter on the other hand, is probably from a loved one, and the writer wants to experience something again, to renew a part of his or her life, even for a moment. This brevity is connected to the dew poignantly, which only comes for a few hours in the day.

The connection between the two images could also infer that the past is not so important as we may believe, and that it is simply “spiderweb dew.”

To get to the image, the colors are striking. I believe the blue signifies the emotion of reading the letter. It is like a modernist painting, with colors that wake you up to the present.

Note: When haiku is accompanied by art, it is called haiga.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)

Robert Gillette’s Loose Leaf

On May 17, 2016May 23, 2018 By Nicholas KlacsanzkyIn HaikuLeave a comment

loose leaf river adrift

Haiku is a lot about concision and Robert’s haiku is definitely concise. Another thing that drew me in is how it presents a moment of insight. A loose leaf has dropped in the river (from what I read into it) but the river is loose itself. In this connection, they are the same.

Also, the format is interesting. It can be read as “loose” and then “leaf river adrift” or as “loose leaf” and then “river adrift.” It can even be read as “loose leaf river” and then “adrift.” So, because of the lack punctuation, there is a lot of interpretations that can be made.

This haiku is an example of something that seems simple, but has many implications.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)