Month: May 2016

Edwin Lomere’s Sunrise

On By Nicholas KlacsanzkyIn Shahai2 Comments

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Words and image © Edwin Lomere (USA)

It is so simple, only one word per line, but it is pregnant with meaning and implication. The photo is taken after sunrise, and appears to be the aftermath of the sunrise. The photo shows two sides of a river or pond, which coincides with “two robins.” As with most shahai, or photo haiku, the photo does not directly reflect the haiku, but adds to it or creates more implications.

The red breast of the robin compliments the red of the sunrise. Also, the song of robin is at once majestic and cheerful, like a sunrise. But with the two robins, the haiku could be implying the sunrise has not happened yet, but the sunrise has been represented twice in the robin’s look and song.

Another reading of it is “two robins twice/the sunrise” which is saying that the sunrise is like seeing or hearing two robins twice. It brings in an aesthetic of fullness that is dear to haiku.

I think this is a spring haiku, not only from the view of the photo, but from the cheerful atmosphere created by the poet.

The sound of the haiku is quite pleasant, with the “o” sound running through “robins” and “two,” and “two” and “twice” having a play with the “t” sound. The “i” sound is in “twice” “robin” and “sunrise, all of which gives a musical quality to the haiku–maybe imitating the song of the robin.

I think the poet slowing the poem down to one word per line makes us not only appreciate each word more, but saves us from having it like:

two robins
twice
the sunrise

…which would afford us less chances to read it differently.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)

Lucky Triana’s Hat

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a triangle hat
i search
my third side

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words and image
© Lucky Triana (Indonesia)

A witty and introspective haiku.

Wordplay in haiku has a long tradition, and when it was the hokku as a part of renga (a long linked poem), it used much more wordplay. So, you could say this haiku tapped into an ancient tradition.

We have a literal interpretation, but the metaphorical one is more interesting to me. Usually, people say they have two sides, but what about a third side? I think the haiku reminds people about who they are beyond the flesh. People often forget their spiritual, metaphysical sides, getting lost in material life.

It’s nice when a haiku can draw us towards our true selves.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky (Ukraine)

Yumino Aoiro’s Depth

On By Nicholas KlacsanzkyIn Haiku3 Comments

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It’s always nice to read unusual haiku/senryu. When poets share something original, they have stronger voices. This is the case with this poem.

It paints a picture of neglect, maybe melancholy, and simplicity. Perhaps the poet noticed his or her cracked fingernail while sorting through the fridge. Though we don’t know exactly what is going on (which is good thing to practice in haiku), the tone of the haiku is that of something gone wrong. It seems that the poet has neglected herself or himself for some reason.

It is an interesting fact that only sandwiches are mentioned. It means that the poet lives a meager existence. So, in the poet’s humble life, something has gone wrong. But using the word “forgotten” I lean towards it being depression–a feeling of loneliness.

The poet envisions the depth of his or her loneliness by the crack on the nail and the amount of forgotten sandwiches. One part is something missing (cracked nail), and the next part is dealing with fullness (many forgotten sandwiches): a strong contrast.

The wording is concise and nicely phrased. I think Yumino wrote a poignant haiku that expressed his or her feelings, and of which we can feel as well.

– Nicholas Klacsanzky